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6/7/2009 6:34:20 PM
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So....
mytiki
eva_remembered
write a song, and try to win, no point in giving a deadline since its just 2 people so just try to write it as soon as possible.
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So....
mytiki
eva_remembered
write a song, and try to win, no point in giving a deadline since its just 2 people so just try to write it as soon as possible.
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posted:
7/8/2009 6:49:29 PM
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Schoolsout
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Gah, I didn't see this.
SORRY!
I'll have mine written in no time.
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Gah, I didn't see this.
SORRY!
I'll have mine written in no time.
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posted:
7/8/2009 9:02:28 PM
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Schoolsout
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Oh really? I gotta find a song!
Okay, I'll have it posted up soon.
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Oh really? I gotta find a song!
Okay, I'll have it posted up soon.
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posted:
7/11/2009 12:11:42 PM
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Schoolsout
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Kay, just a little info and my poem.
NAME: Faded Memories
ARTIST: Myself
OTHER: Well, I cried writing this. It applies to me a lot. I gave up on one of my biggest dreams, and now feel like all my hard work was worth nothing. I actually have a complete tune and everytrhing for this. And I really like it, hopefully you will too.
POEM:
I wish I'd never left all it behind
Couldn't I have just stood strong?
Why can't this memory just be broken-
'Stead of haunting all of my thoughts of mind
Shouldn't I still be back there?
Standing on the shores of Heaven
I wish I could see your face one more time
I know I can't do this alone
I wish leaving was a sweet sent
But no, I have to feel regret
I wish I could see my future while in the past
I would've made these memories wait
And not pass
But now I'm just left with...
Faded memories
I could make a smile stay here
But it's not, it's gone away
Something's should just be left untouched
While others need you to stay
I wish leaving was a sweet sent
But no, I have to feel regret
I wish I could see my future while in the past
I would've made these memories wait
And not pass
But now I'm just left with...
Faded memories
Why can't I just be a mind reader?
I could've saw this would all fail
I would've acted upon my calling
Now I'm just another girl
I wish leaving was a sweet sent
But no, I have to feel regret
I wish I could see my future while in the past
I would've made these memories wait
And not pass
But now I'm just left with...
Faded memories
It's just the faded....
Faded....
Faded....
Mem-or-ies
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Kay, just a little info and my poem.
NAME: Faded Memories
ARTIST: Myself
OTHER: Well, I cried writing this. It applies to me a lot. I gave up on one of my biggest dreams, and now feel like all my hard work was worth nothing. I actually have a complete tune and everytrhing for this. And I really like it, hopefully you will too.
POEM:
I wish I'd never left all it behind
Couldn't I have just stood strong?
Why can't this memory just be broken-
'Stead of haunting all of my thoughts of mind
Shouldn't I still be back there?
Standing on the shores of Heaven
I wish I could see your face one more time
I know I can't do this alone
I wish leaving was a sweet sent
But no, I have to feel regret
I wish I could see my future while in the past
I would've made these memories wait
And not pass
But now I'm just left with...
Faded memories
I could make a smile stay here
But it's not, it's gone away
Something's should just be left untouched
While others need you to stay
I wish leaving was a sweet sent
But no, I have to feel regret
I wish I could see my future while in the past
I would've made these memories wait
And not pass
But now I'm just left with...
Faded memories
Why can't I just be a mind reader?
I could've saw this would all fail
I would've acted upon my calling
Now I'm just another girl
I wish leaving was a sweet sent
But no, I have to feel regret
I wish I could see my future while in the past
I would've made these memories wait
And not pass
But now I'm just left with...
Faded memories
It's just the faded....
Faded....
Faded....
Mem-or-ies
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posted:
7/24/2009 12:06:35 PM
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Schoolsout
rank: 2262
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*To the first page*
Mytiki?
Don't forget to post yours :P
I just want to know the results sorry.
I'm impatient xD
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*To the first page*
Mytiki?
Don't forget to post yours :P
I just want to know the results sorry.
I'm impatient xD
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posted:
8/8/2009 10:02:54 PM
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Schoolsout
rank: 2559
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Annoys eva_remembered til she explodes.
This song is about a girl that wants to live up to her dreams of singing. So she wrote this song to show what will be next.
Gotta Get Somewhere
I'm feeling like I wanna get somewhere,
Not living a run down life,
I'm feeling like I wanna do something,
I wanna do something right.
I don't want to shatter my hopes,
I promise I won't get them to high.
I don't want to fall at the last second,
But I still wanna try.
'Cause this world is to small,
You gotta live your life to it's all.
No second chances,
I wanna jump up,
Go outside.
I wanna do what I wanna do,
Live my life.
I wanna explore the world,
I wanna see everything.
I gotta get somewhere.
I wanna find the perfect boy,
On the sparkling red carpet.
I wanna be more than just a girl,
I wanna cause a riot!
I wanna be the star,
I wanna be the one they turn to,
I wanna be the fashionable one,
I don't wanna be see through.
'Cause this world is to small,
You gotta live your life to it's all.
No second chances,
I wanna jump up,
Go outside.
I wanna do what I wanna do,
Live my life.
I wanna explore the world,
I wanna see everything.
I gotta get somewhere.
With this life,
You don't get another chance ,
One life, one death,
Make this the final dance!
'Cause this world is to small,
You gotta live your life to it's all.
No second chances,
I wanna jump up,
Go outside.
I wanna do what I wanna do,
Live my life.
I wanna explore the world,
I wanna see everything.
I gotta get somewhere.
There,hopefully this one will post up, my other one didn't.
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Annoys eva_remembered til she explodes.
This song is about a girl that wants to live up to her dreams of singing. So she wrote this song to show what will be next.
Gotta Get Somewhere
I'm feeling like I wanna get somewhere,
Not living a run down life,
I'm feeling like I wanna do something,
I wanna do something right.
I don't want to shatter my hopes,
I promise I won't get them to high.
I don't want to fall at the last second,
But I still wanna try.
'Cause this world is to small,
You gotta live your life to it's all.
No second chances,
I wanna jump up,
Go outside.
I wanna do what I wanna do,
Live my life.
I wanna explore the world,
I wanna see everything.
I gotta get somewhere.
I wanna find the perfect boy,
On the sparkling red carpet.
I wanna be more than just a girl,
I wanna cause a riot!
I wanna be the star,
I wanna be the one they turn to,
I wanna be the fashionable one,
I don't wanna be see through.
'Cause this world is to small,
You gotta live your life to it's all.
No second chances,
I wanna jump up,
Go outside.
I wanna do what I wanna do,
Live my life.
I wanna explore the world,
I wanna see everything.
I gotta get somewhere.
With this life,
You don't get another chance ,
One life, one death,
Make this the final dance!
'Cause this world is to small,
You gotta live your life to it's all.
No second chances,
I wanna jump up,
Go outside.
I wanna do what I wanna do,
Live my life.
I wanna explore the world,
I wanna see everything.
I gotta get somewhere.
There,hopefully this one will post up, my other one didn't.
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posted:
8/11/2009 8:53:43 PM
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Schoolsout
rank: 2559
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Okay, you can start judging and all.
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Okay, you can start judging and all.
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posted:
8/13/2009 4:12:19 PM
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Song:Faded Memories
lyricist:Eva_remembered
Grammar: 9.75/10 Error:[COLOR=red]I could've saw...[/COLOR]Unless I am mistaken, it would have been I could've SEEN...I'm sorry if I am wrong.
Emotion: 8.5/10. Emotion is a very important factor of music, it's one thing that makes people like it, because of the emotion put into it. I gave you an 8.5, which is good, it's very emotional, just some things missing.
Connectibilty (Is that a word?): 8/10. In some ways it is very easy to connect to, but in others, not as much, if it has happened to somebody, this song would sound so similar to what they're going through, which is awesome. But This Problem isn't as common as a crush, or a bad relationship.
Originality: 9/10. Although a problem in the factor above, for originality, having a song not about crushes, boys, etc. is very important. Themes not involving love are important, although most people like albums with loved-themed songs and a few songs having to do with somethin else sprinkled across the album. Great job on originality!
Other:I have to say that the lyrics to your song sounded a bit too poetic; words like that are normally just used in actual poems (like, poems, not songs, you know?)Normally songs use a bit less "fancy" language. Of course it does depend on the genre, for slow, mild pop like I used to sing your song, it's just a bit too "poetic", if you were making a metal song I would say you needed a lot more commonly used language in your music, but for your song, I would say you're just above average, so for "Other" 7.5/10?
Total Average:8.55/10
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Song:Faded Memories
lyricist:Eva_remembered
Grammar: 9.75/10 Error:[COLOR=red]I could've saw...[/COLOR]Unless I am mistaken, it would have been I could've SEEN...I'm sorry if I am wrong.
Emotion: 8.5/10. Emotion is a very important factor of music, it's one thing that makes people like it, because of the emotion put into it. I gave you an 8.5, which is good, it's very emotional, just some things missing.
Connectibilty (Is that a word?): 8/10. In some ways it is very easy to connect to, but in others, not as much, if it has happened to somebody, this song would sound so similar to what they're going through, which is awesome. But This Problem isn't as common as a crush, or a bad relationship.
Originality: 9/10. Although a problem in the factor above, for originality, having a song not about crushes, boys, etc. is very important. Themes not involving love are important, although most people like albums with loved-themed songs and a few songs having to do with somethin else sprinkled across the album. Great job on originality!
Other:I have to say that the lyrics to your song sounded a bit too poetic; words like that are normally just used in actual poems (like, poems, not songs, you know?)Normally songs use a bit less "fancy" language. Of course it does depend on the genre, for slow, mild pop like I used to sing your song, it's just a bit too "poetic", if you were making a metal song I would say you needed a lot more commonly used language in your music, but for your song, I would say you're just above average, so for "Other" 7.5/10?
Total Average:8.55/10
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8/13/2009 4:39:03 PM
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Song:Gotta Get Somewhere
Lyricist:Mytiki
Grammar: 9/10 Errors: You made the mistake of not putting a hyphen in between see and through, in the word see-through and you spelled too like x3. example:...world is to small,.
Emotion: 7/10 I find with some of the language you use, you do not express the emotion that was meant to be put in the song I wanna find the perfect boy,
On the sparkling red carpet.
I wanna be more than just a girl,
I wanna cause a riot!
I wanna be the star,
I wanna be the one they turn to,
I wanna be the fashionable one,
I don't wanna be see through Just doesn't seem to be that expressive, it shows what you want more than what you feel, meanwhile, the chorus is quite emotional.
Connectibility: 9.25/10, This is a very important theme, especially in pre-teens/teens. Wanting to follow one's dreams is very easy to connect to, especially at an age when we are finding who we are.
Originality: 8/10. Although not following the theme of love, the most commonly used theme in music, Following dreams is quite a popular topic, I'm giving this an eight because it still is quite original.
Other: These lyrics remind me of something that, maybe, Demi Lovato would write. She's a talented lyricist, but sometimes she uses some different words to connect to the audience, as it does that, it also takes away some of the poetry and beauty from the song (not that your song's not pretty). Her song La La Land is meaningful, but isn't quite so poetic or pretty because of some of the words and phrases she uses. I'd say your song-writing is like Demi's (I hope you don't dislike her, I find she's pretty good! =D) So...8/10.
Total Average: 8.25/10
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Song:Gotta Get Somewhere
Lyricist:Mytiki
Grammar: 9/10 Errors: You made the mistake of not putting a hyphen in between see and through, in the word see-through and you spelled too like x3. example:...world is to small,.
Emotion: 7/10 I find with some of the language you use, you do not express the emotion that was meant to be put in the song I wanna find the perfect boy,
On the sparkling red carpet.
I wanna be more than just a girl,
I wanna cause a riot!
I wanna be the star,
I wanna be the one they turn to,
I wanna be the fashionable one,
I don't wanna be see through Just doesn't seem to be that expressive, it shows what you want more than what you feel, meanwhile, the chorus is quite emotional.
Connectibility: 9.25/10, This is a very important theme, especially in pre-teens/teens. Wanting to follow one's dreams is very easy to connect to, especially at an age when we are finding who we are.
Originality: 8/10. Although not following the theme of love, the most commonly used theme in music, Following dreams is quite a popular topic, I'm giving this an eight because it still is quite original.
Other: These lyrics remind me of something that, maybe, Demi Lovato would write. She's a talented lyricist, but sometimes she uses some different words to connect to the audience, as it does that, it also takes away some of the poetry and beauty from the song (not that your song's not pretty). Her song La La Land is meaningful, but isn't quite so poetic or pretty because of some of the words and phrases she uses. I'd say your song-writing is like Demi's (I hope you don't dislike her, I find she's pretty good! =D) So...8/10.
Total Average: 8.25/10
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8/13/2009 4:41:35 PM
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Congratulations to the winner:Eva_remembered with 8.55/10
and to the runner-up, 0.30 points behind, Mytiki! with 8.25/10
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Congratulations to the winner:Eva_remembered with 8.55/10
and to the runner-up, 0.30 points behind, Mytiki! with 8.25/10
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posted:
8/13/2009 6:51:03 PM
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Schoolsout
rank: 2262
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At this time normally I'd be correcting somethings you said, but really it's not the time...
Thank you LNH for picking me as the winner!
Thank you to the other contestantz for entering.
And congratz to Kiti. You're poem was great! And I barely won. You're poem would have been a great choice as winner.
This is actually the first writing thing I've really won, so that's like :O
Thanks again =D
Excuse me if this post doesn't make much sense, I'm listening to some music so I'm not really noticing what I'm tying, haha (:
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At this time normally I'd be correcting somethings you said, but really it's not the time...
Thank you LNH for picking me as the winner!
Thank you to the other contestantz for entering.
And congratz to Kiti. You're poem was great! And I barely won. You're poem would have been a great choice as winner.
This is actually the first writing thing I've really won, so that's like :O
Thanks again =D
Excuse me if this post doesn't make much sense, I'm listening to some music so I'm not really noticing what I'm tying, haha (:
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posted:
8/13/2009 7:18:52 PM
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Schoolsout
rank: 2559
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Congrats!
Ya, I didn't really use my brain with that song. If I could try again I would probably post up "Hopeless Inspirations" one of my better ones.
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Congrats!
Ya, I didn't really use my brain with that song. If I could try again I would probably post up "Hopeless Inspirations" one of my better ones.
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posted:
8/27/2009 11:30:00 AM
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Schoolsout
rank: 4313
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Gratz guys!
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Gratz guys!
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posted:
8/29/2009 11:34:19 PM
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Schoolsout
rank: 2038
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Congrats!
*throws party*
*dances*
=D]]
- - - f i s h y ♥
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Congrats!
*throws party*
*dances*
=D]]
- - - f i s h y ♥
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posted:
12/1/2009 4:55:23 PM
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Sunshower
rank: 174
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nice dude,,
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nice dude,,
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